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Just trying something out

Post by Guest on Tue Mar 13, 2012 3:32 pm

Is this the end, am I going to die? Lifes so short and I'm so young, I know it's a one round dance but I'm still a child. Is this the end? Will the sun soon fade and darkness without stars apear? Oooohhhh I thinking I'm loosing my grip on life.
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Life just a one round dance that adventily ends. It's quite a mystery, surprising and fun. It's beautiful yet confusing, and with out it don't know where I'd be. Sooo afraid of dieing yet curios what it's like. Life, it's a mystery, a one round dance, a chance at love and enlightenment.

It's horrible but hey at least I tried to make part of a song, let me know if you got any tips or ideas for more of the song.

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Post by themagus on Tue Mar 13, 2012 3:51 pm

first part looks good, the secound part can be further edited for wording mostly, i couldn't see that rhyme but then again im not the greatest music person...

i like it, anyways

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Re: Just trying something out

Post by Guest on Tue Mar 13, 2012 4:00 pm

Thanks, I suck at rhyming but I'll give it a try I'll work on the sceant part.

Life is a one round dance that ends advently, it's quite a mystery.

Confusing yet beautiful maybe some day in the future they'll learn about me in history.

It's surprising and fun so try not to rush through it, it's just a one round dance.

Hmm what rhmys with dance?

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